• Published 17th Jul 2023
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Sunny Shores - That's Where I Wanna Be - Mokoma



It's a place with warm waters, a cool breeze, and radiant sunshine. It's not here. But that's where I wanna be. Even though - it's not time yet.

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Cold Draft

"Here!" Cried out the mare. "We've got a live one! I have a pulse! Get the fucking tools here now before she bleeds out, we need to remove the debris and amputate the leg!"

It was so cold that Strawberry felt numb.

"Hey, it's okay..." The blue mare wearing a medic's helmet leaned in, putting her hand on her cheek. "It's okay baby...Just hang on...Please, just hang on. Okay? Please hang on. I found a photo in your jacket. Little green filly and a red stallion...Please think about them right now, okay? O-Our hospital is right in Vrponsko, they'll be able to visit you immediately. Just please, hang on..." She said, gently stroking Strawberry's cheek, before turning to shout at the other River soldiers. "MORONS, I needed those tools here YESTERDAY! Start cutting the damn wood pinning her other hoof down, NOW! And get me morphine, stat!"

It was so cold that Strawberry felt weak...

And yet, Strawberry was able to reach a hoof forward.

Not at the mare - who was now focused on taking out a bonesaw.

But at the little patch of open clouds that revealed the sun - shining upon her if not but a brief moment.

She whispered weakly, forcing a sad smile past her bloodied lips. "...Y-You guys are...real...sentimental..."

It was so cold that Strawberry felt frozen to the bone.

But as long as she remembered Sunny Shores...

The warmth in her heart would never fade away.

Comments ( 2 )

Optimistic in a (positively) painful sense, but that's what this is and I adore this fic for that. It does bring into focus one thing about warfare that is just as important as fighting the enemy before you: of the people behind you that you've sworn to protect. The gruesomely late realization that everyone else is dead and that Sunny Shores is, well, some sort of afterlife just brings it home even more. Strawberry's duty might've ended there... but she had to pull through for the ponies that still lived.

Notably, the suddenness of the chapter's events give it a dream-like quality. Other than the first chapter, there's little to no preparation for the whiplash that is the turn to preparing for an invasion, to the actual fighting, to getting on a beach somehow, and then getting back to the living. While I think part of it might've been a precaution to stay below the word limit, it does have its own quality of, well... you know the thing about a dreamer not knowing how he got where he is right now? Inception style? I think that works in your favor here, given... well, the afterlife being a place we visit here.

With that, thank you for the nice story, Mokoma!

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