Practice could have gone better.
First, there were all the missed landings and failed flips. Then, Ocellus had forgotten the words to the cheers while the junior pony team showed out with perfect rhythm and volume. Oh, and there was the whole getting crushed and paralyzed thing.
Yeah, come to think of it, that was probably the worst part.
For a pony, such a thing might be devastating. For a dragon like Smolder? Still devastating, but Scales do these ponies love to drown their wounded in cards and balloons. And the way they talk to her, it's like they expect her just to lay around and cry all day or something.
Yeah, that ain't Smolder.
Thankfully, Gallus gets it at least. Smolder doesn't want to spend her days sitting around in bed, feeling sorry for herself. If she's going to be forced to sit on her butt for the rest of her life, she wants to at least do it out in the open—roll around the hallways, prank a few nurses, have a race or two despite doctors yelling at her not to, those good 'ol things. Those doctors may have their degrees in medicine, but she's a few months away from a degree in friendship, and friends and living don't come from just sitting around and being sad and stuff. They come from getting out there, meeting fellow injured souls, and bringing some smiles and joy into their lives. Who says a hospital has to be a place without smiles?
And what better way to bring smiles to every creature's face than a good old-fashioned wheelchair race? It certainly brings a smile to Gallus', and Smolder will take any excuse to hang out with her favorite griffon.
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A romantic dramedy. Rated T for profanity, some suggestive themes/references (no actual sex), and a debilitating accident.
Updates on Mondays and Fridays for the first 8 or so chapters. Hopefully, the amount of chapters already typed will provide a solid enough cushion to keep that schedule up (55,000+ words of it are already written).
Comments welcome! DMs are also open if you have any questions or comments that you'd rather state/ask privately rather than publicly in the comments section.
(Coverart is a screencap of the show. Hoping to eventually get some real cover art. If ya know anyone who might be up to it...)
In retrospect...perhaps a bad choice of words on Dash's part, given what's coming.
Yeah, I'll bet Ocellus and Yona both feel extremely guilty for what happened, regardless of who was or was not actually at fault.
Oh, but this fic's going to be a good one, I can already tell.
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It's where the force is exerted that matters, actually. Apply it in the right manner and in the right spot, and even the strongest of materials will still break. And having actually read the chapter, I can attest the nature of the injury is believably still enough to affect even a dragon so.
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Being resistant or immune to X doesn't mean Y cant wreck your day entirely. Extreme heat immunity doesn't remotely translate into a crush resistant spine.
Yowch, that’s all I can think after hearing the description of what happened to Smolder.
So a potentially important question...does Smolder still have feeling in her tail, or was that paralyzed too? Because in thinking about the nature of her injury, I could easily see her losing feeling in her tail too, given it'd be in the line of fire for the same sort of damage that her legs have suffered.
Yeah, that seems about right for their brother/sister relationship.
Whaaaat? He's just speaking in a language Smolder understands!
Oh, I'm totally writing that one down for later use.
I love how you're not beating about the bush on the nitty-gritty details of Smolder's injury and all the bodily consequences that come with it. I've always been of the opinion that if one's going to write about topics such as this, you need to go all in on it--no point trying to sugarcoat it. The details might be unpleasant, but that doesn't make them go away. And acknowledging them just makes it feel all the more real.
Definitely one of the most effective lines I’ve read in a story in quite a while. Love it.
And I love the start to this story! Keep up the good work my good man
Sounds like her tail is indeed paralyzed as well then. Surprised that hadn't been more clearly stated before now, because her tail may not be as vital as her legs, obviously, but it still plays a few vital roles for her body nonetheless. For example, steering while in flight (which surely she's going to want to try at some point, because her wings are still working so there's no reason she can't still do it, it'll just be more complicated given the lack of, shall we say, "landing gear").
He would.
Still greatly enjoying the story. It's been a good while since I've last been this excited to see the next chapter of a fic like this.
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Yeah, your comment last chapter made me realize that I hadn't clarified that about her tail--and that I needed to! Honestly, I had not even considered the affect Smolder's paralysis would have on her tail, but once I thought about it you are correct: it's quite a vital limb for a dragon.
Thank you so much for the comments. Already, they have had an influence that will (hopefully) make future chapters just as enjoyable!
Why isn’t there a violence and/or gore tag. Even if the accident is shown off-screen, that amount of damage done to someone should get at least one of those tags.
I know it's just a dream, and thus not reflective of reality...but I can't really picture Ember being that cold about it. Heck, I'd sooner expect her, the moment she finds out about Smolder's condition, of storming into Twilight's office so to blame the ponies entirely for it.
Guess we'll have to see if I'm right about any of that though. For Smolder's sake, I hope I am.
...huh. That's an interesting detail...
A whole stack of them, technically.
Like so:
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Wuh-oh! I already know where that's going!
Questions everybody's still asking, and really wishing G4 hadn't neglected to clarify before passing on the torch.
Gosh, I love this fic. I just sort of instinctively knew it was going to be a good one from the moment I first found it and so far it's absolutely delivered on that.
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Because there wasn't really any gore, and there still hasn't been up to now either. As for violence...depends on how you want to define violence, I suppose. The accident was just that, after all, a very unfortunate accident. No violence was deliberately done, and no violence has really followed (up to now) either. Since adding a violence tag generally implies there'd be violence through out a significant portion of the story, I don't think it'd be accurate for this particular fic to include it. But...ultimately it's up to the author whether or not it gets added.
I want to hug Smolder so badly 😭
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Kinda echoing what Scyphi said here, but there's no violence tag because I picture the violence tag as a sign that there's consistent action and violence in a story. The description of the content warning tag on the site says that the tag is for more persistent action/violence. Plus, the story doesn't really describe the 'accident' in detail due to only seeing it through Smolder's POV--at least not in a very visually descriptive way. Personally, I don't think it warrants the tag, but I may add a warning in the long description.
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Yeah, that is decidedly not in-character for Ember, but Smolder is going through a lot of anxiety at the moment. In those anxious moments, it's easy for the ol' scumbag brain to twist the ever-loving crap out of reality. Ember would definitely be one of the first to be at Smolder's bedside the moment she got the news.
(Of course, now I'm picturing Ember busting into the school's office and tearing the poor janitor a new one because she can't tell ponies apart. M'am, this is a Wendy's)
Also for the Gallus detail... well, there may be future scenes/chapters exploring points of view outside of Smolder's, so I'll leave it at that
Glad you're enjoying it! I'm really enjoying writing this one and knowing I'm not the only one is such a great motivator. Thank you so much for the great comments!
The pacing and descriptors of mental turmoil and supporting ambiance are incredibly well done. Amazing writing, my friend.
Well plushies usually get a pretty interesting looks despite it could be ugly they still wanted it my niece is like that she has weird stuff animals
Reopening the wounds. 'Sorry about your legs.' 'We're thinking about you.' Great. That won't change anything, so let's just move on from that shall we?
I wouldn't say words are useless or anything like that being negative doesn't help either and I get it I felt the same way too when I hurt myself and I couldn't do much and I get grouchy and annoyed too but being like that doesn't help anybody it just hurts not just only you but other people who you cared about
Aww I'm sure you do Yona and you guys are very cute together
Oh dear I felt like that's a little bit extreme
Out of the mouths of babes!
Eh, but give it a couple more years at most, Starry.
Well, I dunno, I think that whole scene with Gallus and Smolder working together to get herself into the wheelchair rather significant. As simple an action as it probably seems outwardly, it was still kind of a noteworthy step for all involved.
Ohh she jealous
Oh dear that's not good and what a way to start at the story so it looks like smolder is flashbacking about the day of the accident basically they were doing a couple of cheer dancing and smolder and the other two are getting their roof on with their cheerleading even though they kind of messed up a little bit and they were about to be next but Yona want to make the impossible which Ocellus feels this is a bad idea but smolder got very jealous and she really wants to go for it to get Gallus impressive her skill with her friends and it looks like they begin and it looks like everything was doing okay until literally everything collapsed Ocellus was panicking is still in her Yak form landing on smolder really hard and it looks like she's really hurts and Gallus trying to tell her to don't move but unfortunately she didn't have to because she can't feel her legs apparently something damaged her spine and now her biggest fear is coming in full force
Yeah a little I mean they want to do something nice but sometimes a little bit too much
Yeah maybe that was not a good idea especially in a hospital
Well at least nurse red heart understands pretty well
Oh my
Starry’s cuteness can cure cancer
Aww I got to say this is actually pretty sweet and pretty funny so it looks like smolder is feeling a little overwhelmed and even bored in this room just laying down and everything and it's really nice of Rarity giving some possess in the room and also Gallus showing up as well which she was pretty excited to see him both of them just talking with each other and there's something she might slip up and almost crushing on him but it looks like he has some idea to take her out what she really needs it but of course they need to ask nurse red heart to help which she did since she's been working the hospital she knows how to maneuver patients and everything I wonder what they're going to do
Awww that is so nice of him to do that and not only that he hates studying but he put his needs aside for now that's cool
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Ember, sure. Dragon society at large... that's another matter. Between the emphasis their culture places on physical strength and most dragons aside from Spike, Smolder, and Ember being more or less toxic masculinity incarnate, Smolder visiting her homeland would likely get ugly fast.
Of course, Ember does seem like the kind of leader who'd work to improve things there, but that's a slow process in the best of times - you're talking about more or less rewriting a big chunk of dragon culture, so much that it's anyone's guess as to whether that would get results before Equestrian medical science gets better at treating spinal cord injuries.
Ohh busted 😰
you basically just gave yourself up man
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Hey, if nothing else Gallus is passing honesty class
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Well I would say it was a pretty interesting one and pretty nice to see these two having fun despite the situation and smolder is getting a hang of the wheelchair while Gallus is having problem but she has like scary thoughts about one of her friends being in a wheelchair or never move again like her I mean I'm glad she's thinking about the others the safety despite she was the one who got hurt it was also nice to see Rainbow Dash visiting as well and of course those two really are comparative with each other so they race in the wheelchair but unfortunately nurse Red Heart caught them and got in trouble but luckily she's not too upset but she did tell them not to do that ever again she nice but very strict I wonder what else could happen
I'm sure ember will not say something like that to you it's just a fear get into your head now
This is actually the time that Princess Luna should come right now this is actually a huge Miss opportunity to include her in the story especially when Smolder is having a nightmare