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GeoffNunchucks


Hi there. I'm Old Gregg. Pleased ta meet ya.

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Twenty five years after the crowning of Emperor Valerian, the Terran Dominion has entered a golden age of relative peace, prosperity, and scientific advancement. However, in the wake of the Great Wars many worlds once lost to invasion remained under alien control, leading to a decades long reclamation campaign. On the recently liberated ice world of Braxis, a detachment of marines are left behind for security. When a perimeter breach results in massive casualties, a small group of Dominion scout troopers find themselves marooned far from home in a strange land, pitted against a powerful foe.

And to the local populace, they may be their only hope.

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 6 )

I've finished reading the first 3 chapters and gotta say they're very well written. The story feels fast paced but not rushed and also tell the urgency of the situation they're in. The interactions between characters feel very natural and go with the flow of the story without breaking immersion. Along with the explanation of a lot of StarCraft lore through dialogue and discussion between squad members without feeling like an info dump is really hitting al the good spot. That's my thought so far, I can't wait to see what's to come in the next chapters. Keep up the great work.

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Hey, thanks! It's been an idea I've had rattling around in my head for a while and wanted to work on honing my skills here.

I will follow your career with great interest!

I was slightly disappointed by the usage of translation magic. Why? Because from my reading experience it's a cheap and lazy way of making first contact easier, that's both my and some's opinion. But as I continue reading that disappointment turns into praise due to how good your writing is.

Most stories I've read the author introduces language barrier problem and instantly invalidate/solve it by the usage of translation magics and never mentioned it again. Your story however maintains that problem consistently by establishing that only and all changeling know the spell which make Dory's and the changeling role even more important and also make the Terrans rely on them until the main forces arrive and they could get some kind of translation machines/devices work on. This is a 10/10 wrting right here. Not many can keep their story this consistent both from lore and plot wise.

From the dialogue and interaction I can see that Discord and quite possibly Celestia know about Braxis/Khyrador and have some connections to the Protoss. These details really makes for quite a good foreshadowing and keep the story interesting and keep the reader head thinks deeply and theorize.

I'm looking forward to seeing the next chapters.

This was pretty nice.

Hell yeah, time to fuck up the ZERG!! Honestly, this story needs more views and comments.

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